march 2008

Guess I've changed
just about everything,
not especially for the better
different, yes
better, no

January 2008

Whoa -- it's certainly gotten
a lot more florid in the last month,
and the characters feel less staid.

Now, there's an awkwardness about Eve
that bothers me,
and the piece seems uneven
left to right






These figures have pulped out some more,
and feel a little more desperate.
But has the piece improved ?










This piece feels scarier,
and more magical,
and I'm happy about that.
Can I ratchet it up any more ?
I'm not sure.




I'm afraid
I do kind of like the earlier version
better.

This figure is getting too awkward.

I'm trying to make her feel
more as a prisoner of her destiny

December 2007

Adam and Eve

I've feeling good about the right side
of this design

But Adam needs something...
to be both more vulnerable
and more vigorous/youthful/manly
He needs to be erupting a little more from
his background












Birth of Venus


Maybe she needs to be little younger,
a little more like a spring
uncoiling.
(and the left side is not happy with the right)

I want a greater sense
of the difficulty of her emergence









Michael and Satan

I'm liking Satan's fall
more than Michael's triumph.

It's not quite majestic enough,
he's supposed to have
the power of the cosmos
after all.





"Mars and Venus
Heaving in the net
that limping Vulcan
and his Cyclops set"


I like Mars the best at this point,
maybe Venus needs to do
some more writhing ?
Overall -- the piece needs to feel
less cute and more monumental.

maybe I should throw
a net across Venus ?